#OctPoWriMo Day 13-If I Were You

If I Were You

By Jesi Scott

 

If I were you

If you were me

Perhaps you’d see

Perhaps you’d be

The one I’d crave

The one to save

Save my life

Save my world

World in my heart

World torn apart

Apart from this

Apart and dismissed

Dismissed from here

Dismissed to disappear

Disappear from life

Disappear from view

View my hurt

View my pain

Pain everlasting

Pain forecasting

Forecasting to amend

Forecasting the end

End the history

End my misery

Misery of us

Misery in exodus

Exodus of the end

Exodus to begin

Begin again

Begin and feign

Feign these feelings

Feign these meanings

Meanings that lie

Meanings that cry

Cry a river

Cry and deliver

Deliver the package

Deliver the message

Message left behind

Message that’s over

Over and out

Over and without

Without a word

Without a doubt

Doubt you

Doubt me

Me in truth

Me so obvious

Obvious

Truth.

 

* Day 13: to express to someone your point of view using a Blitz poem, not my favorite form. I decided to put more thought and interest in it by making it rhyme as much as I could and to try and make it a little more challenging.

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10 comments on “#OctPoWriMo Day 13-If I Were You

  1. bobcabkings says:

    When I read these lines:

    “Meanings that cry

    Cry a river

    Cry and deliver”

    Along side, a song played in memory’s ear.

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  2. bobcabkings says:

    Reblogged this on cabbagesandkings524 and commented:
    At The Well Tempered Bards, Jesi Scott – What if we could walk a mile in each other’s hearts?

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Hmm an interesting style, definitely made me think. Thank you for the poem.
    Since you said this is not your favorite style, what is your favorite style. One poet to another

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    • Jesi Scott says:

      I’m a huge fan of terzanelles, villanelles, and generally forms with a set meter. I usually write in open form (free form) though. Still, when I do sit down to write in a specific form, these are my favorites. Pleiades poetry form is also a fave.

      Like

  4. Lizzi says:

    Cool, but tricky! Rather you than me there!

    Liked by 1 person

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