Love, in ten lines

I got challenged by the very creative and wonderful ‘SourGirlOhio‘ to come up with an incredibly constricted poem on love. I haven’t decided whether love is a topic I try to avoid, or one I wax lyrical on pretty much all the time. Perhaps it depends on your perspective.

Love in Ten Lines

Anyway, I needed something to undo the log-jam which has been blocking my poetic mind, and this was just the thing. It’s not a traditional poem by any stretch, yet somewhere in the formatting, something counts as poetry. So there.

THE RULES (because this is a TAGGING game, yo!)

1. Write about love using only 10 lines.
2. Use “love” in every line.
3. Each line can only be 4 words long.
4. Nominate 10 Or So others who are up for the challenge.
5. Let them know about the challenge.
6. Title the post, Love in Ten Lines
7. Include a quote about love

SOOOOooooooo I’m tagging

My Fellow Bard; Ivy

My BlogWife; Beth

My 1000Mile Heart; Sunset

The Lunatic Poet; Jesi

The Dilettante; Helena

The ‘Angry’ Black Woman; Tamara

And anyone else who wants to try this intensely tricky format.

Here’s my effort:

Was this destined, Love?
I love your soul
You love mine, still
Love’s insufficient – the toll:
Is love lacking friendship
Turning love to resentment?
Making love feel unpleasant –
Rendering love a defendant;
We’re listless, wasted, Love…
We don’t love this.

“It is not a lack of love, but a lack of friendship that makes unhappy marriages.” ―Friedrich Nietzsche

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30 comments on “Love, in ten lines

  1. beth teliho says:

    ohhhhh excellent attempt, Lizzi dear!! I really like it! and GAH this is hard! But fun…looking forward to trying. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  2. You are one bee-zy bee!! This is good, Lizzi. Deep and though provoking. I especially like the line, ‘Rendering love a defendant’.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Breathless, I love you,
    And love stains us.
    We breathe in love,
    And feed on love,
    ‘Til we consume love,
    Else, by love consumed,
    We lose that love
    And once love lost,
    Seek new love elsewhere,
    Used, broken, stained love.

    Liked by 5 people

  4. DCTdesigns says:

    Do I need to be chipper? My first attempt seems anything but.Argh

    Liked by 1 person

  5. […] my fellow bard, has challenged me with the above task. As she so aptly put it is not a traditional format, but maybe it may also help […]

    Liked by 1 person

  6. ivywalker says:

    YER ON….LETS DO THIS!!!! Well, Its done actually! THanks for the invite, Bardy buddy!

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Hmm…love the Nietzsche quote. Very true.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Katie Paul says:

    I never knew love
    Until love walked away
    To love a place
    Love could not withstand
    A different love flourishes
    Without love’s calloused hands
    Leaving kisses love ignored
    Filling gaps love left
    Forgetting love’s lies, is
    how I love you.

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  9. sourgirlohio says:

    Lizzi! That was very fast, it took me a week to write one of these! I’m not good with forced structure, but hey, that’s why it’s a challenge.

    Lovely poem, dear.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. amycake76 says:

    Ivy tagged me. I’m gonna give it a shot when I have two minutes to string together.

    Liked by 1 person

  11. frannnie says:

    and now from the darker side of love…

    dr. love you quack
    dole out love like
    smack, jiggling love filled
    sack, tasty love bite
    snack, love worn bloody
    attack, countless lovers left
    whacked, love torn ruthless
    pact, Love, please take
    me back, love me
    please you loveless hack!

    ***Hafiz
    with that moon language

    admit something:
    everyone you see, you say to them “love me”.
    of course you do not do this out loud: otherwise,
    someone would call the cops.
    still, though, think about this, this great pull in us
    to connect.
    why not become the one who lives with a full moon
    in each eye that is always saying,
    with that sweet moon language,
    what every other eye in this world is dying to hear?

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  12. ivywalker says:

    FRANNIE FRANNIE FRANNIE!!!!

    HUZZ AH!!!!!

    LYDIA

    Liked by 1 person

  13. frannnie says:

    LOVE is liminal, infinite,
    intrinsic, intuitive, divine : LOVE
    boundless patterns, unfolding : LOVE
    eternal cycles evoke : LOVE
    creative, healing, transformative : LOVE
    yearning, beckoning, redemptive : LOVE
    she, he, they : LOVE
    you, me, we : LOVE
    open and be LOVE(D)
    release and bring LOVE

    be of love (a little)
    More careful
    Than of everything
    -E.E. Cummings

    Liked by 1 person

  14. frannnie says:

    jolly good fun thanks y’all !!!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. DCTdesigns says:

    Lizzie- my friend DT and I gave it a try. We were of course craving Ben & Jerry’s ice cream. Here you go.

    Americone Dream in love.
    Chubby Hubby loves me,
    Loves my Cinnamon Buns.
    Love my Chunkey Monkey,
    Love his Vanilla cone.

    Love hits Rocky Road.
    Half Baked love affair,
    Sticky Caramel Sutra love,
    Hazed & Confused love-
    Love in Chocolate therapy.

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