Down At the Country Store

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At the Elm Street Market they sit and chat like Mayberry’s best

all retired, some widowed, all lonely.

Under the pretense of the morning news they

drink coffee and smoke cigarettes.

Contacts formerly provided by work and family have drifted.

Gone are the blueprints for a structured existence.

Gone are the words of their youth.

Well aware of what they need,

they reach out to each other.

Seeking connection

they begin to draw the diagrams.

They hunt for words to rewrite their lives.

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25 comments on “Down At the Country Store

  1. […] At The Country Store […]

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  2. lrconsiderer says:

    At least they have each other. I love how we timed this – almost as if it were on purpose 😉

    You paint a clear picture. I like it 🙂

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  3. dyannedillon says:

    I know places just like this.

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  4. valj2750 says:

    My favorite line is gone are the blueprints for a structured existence.

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  5. In the last years of his life my father and his friends met just like this each weekday morning at the small local café to drink coffee and “chew the fat” and talk about the way things used to be and the way that kids are now. 🙂 I never realized just how many good friends my father had until I returned home for his funeral. It pleased me to see how loved and respected that he was in the small town where I grew up.

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  6. Madhura says:

    ‘Gone are the blueprints for a structured existence’. This line rings so true. Love it.

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  7. Fida says:

    Wow! I had to take a step back! It sounds like a simple poem but it’s not with it’s touch and reminder. Thank you for this beautiful piece!

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  8. Linda Kay says:

    This takes me back to my home town of 1900 folks. At one time there were so many “characters: who sat on benches by the stores (now few) to visit with folks as they walked by. There is still a local restaurant with a round table to accommodate those who want to catch up on the news.

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  9. I know these folks.

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  10. Christine says:

    Nice job, very evocative of a lonely feeling of getting older and less relevant. I like how at the end you leave an opening for transformation and a renewed sense of purpose!

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  11. Gone are the words of their youth.

    Well aware of what they need,

    they reach out to each other.

    Wonderful lines there Zoe 🙂

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  12. shanjeniah says:

    **Well aware of what they need,

    they reach out to each other.

    Seeking connection

    they begin to draw the diagrams.

    They hunt for words to rewrite their lives.**

    Oh!!

    Brilliant and potent and lovely! =D

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