Each day I hold you
In my heart
Hoping (fingers crossed)
That it will turn out
Differently somehow
With lesser cost
Than this;
Watching you fall upon
That nightshade sword
And, injured,
Bare yourself –
Your spirit poured –
Floundering
Across the
Bleeding skies.
Your fading light
Elicits anguished
Heart-strung cries:
I’m on my knees
Eyes teardropped
Calling out your name.
Wavering, you smile;
I’m sun-kissed.
You’ll be back again.
I stand once more
Twinned in darkness,
Assured of victory;
Waiting, star-lit
‘Til you return
And cover me in glory.
The images this evokes is simply gorgeous. I loved it, especially the ending tinged with hope!
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Thanks so much, Mark. I was particularly pleased about the ending and the parallels I drew between bouts of depression and the sun reappearing again (presumably to go through it all again at some point, but at least still HERE) 🙂 – I’m glad you picked up on the hope.
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I love the rhythm of this.
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Thank you so much! It surprised me – it wasn’t intentional until about halfway through the second stanza (when I realised that it *had* a rhythm) 🙂
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love the rythem … love the weaving feeling of the write … loved your poem …
Heart-strung cries:
I’m on my knees
Eyes teardropped
Calling out your name.
Sublime.
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Ahh thanks so much 🙂 It always amazes me how much emotion can be conveyed in relatively simple lines, and I’m thankful I’m able to write like this. It’s lovely to know how much you enjoyed it 🙂
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I love the art of synthesis in poetry .. 🙂
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There are so many great short lines in this that draw your attention. Lovely job with this one. Have a great Sunday.
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Aw thanks so much 🙂 I’m glad you like it so much. I like the choppy feel of the shortness of each part. Happy Sunday to you x
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Yknow lizzi im not sure I can add to whats been said….special piece of work.
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I like it. Took me a while, this did, but I’m really happy with it. Thank you 🙂
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This is really beautiful Lizzi, you had me right there with you! So very well done!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it. It was lovely to write.
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Wow, Lizzi.
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Aw thanks 🙂 This one means a lot to me.
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Lovely Lizzi, simply lovely.
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Thank you 🙂 I’m glad this one’s getting positive feedback. I rather like it 🙂
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