Ode On A Grecian Formula

As OctPoWriMo enters 2014, I would like to take my poetry in a bit less angst-filled direction.
This is my first attempt. Be Gentle.

Thou maker of unravished men,

Oh Fountain of Youth, and slow Time,

Women of reason inquire “When?”

And “What goddess bore these boys so past their prime?”

Age’s debt disguised in  trivial deceit

Stands delinquent, unpaid, overdue.

What sweet legend will he create, to hide his ageless receipt?

Senescent god of the blue-wash shampoo.


Youth is sweet, but life well lived is sweeter.

Pushing back the due date of maturity comes at a price.

Father time will not long humor the cheater,

Rendering his toll on your helmet-head of gneiss.*

Brothers to the north interdict thou worthless quest,**

So transparent is your guise of libertine, fair Youth.

Toxicity thou wil’st not evade, and comes at Vanity’s behest

Leaden carcinogens impel the irony of eternal truth.  Z~

*gneiss: a laminated metamorphic rock similar to granite
** Grecian Formula in Grey Zone After Ban : A Key ingredient in products used by men to disguise grey hair has been banned by Health Canada because it is suspected of being a carcinogen, as well as a reproductive toxin.
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30 comments on “Ode On A Grecian Formula



  2. Lance says:

    Nice poem. As a guy to whom this product is marketed, I really enjoyed it.


  3. lrconsiderer says:

    Actually I love this. Bravo. And I learned words.


  4. marisab04 says:

    Wow awesome – truth in verse (is that right ,..just woke up ) 🙂


  5. Much food for thought here.


  6. “Youth is sweet, a life well lived is sweeter!” True words.. loved this poem.


  7. seekingmeme says:

    “Pushing back the due date of maturity …” What a fantastic image. Loved your poem!


  8. Linda Kay says:

    Your picture reminded me of a time when we colored my husbands early gray hair when he was applying for a new job. I’m sure it made a difference. Loved the poem.


    • zoebyrd says:

      You would hope some obvious maturity would be more valued than a good dye job but hey… Im glad it worked either way and I totally know what you mean! Thanks so much!


  9. I was snapping at the end of the first stanza and was surprised it wasn’t over then…. reminded me of when we applaud without realizing there is more song to be sung. I always enjoy a little poetic “in the know” humor, so you had me with the title. Very fun – and if your intent is to be less angsty, many congratulations! You did it!


  10. Very creative and fun! I didn’t know that Grecian formula was banned in Canada, one more thing that the U.S. is behind in protecting its citizens.


  11. Christine says:

    What a wonderful first poem! Can’t wait to read more. That was such fun! I like it that you’re challenging yourself to do something different.


  12. Lita/Leslye says:

    I enjoyed reading this. I like your style of writing. And I learned some new words! 🙂


  13. dyannedillon says:

    I keep thinking of “Ode to a Grecian Urn” from The Music Man and picturing boxes of Grecian Formula falling off the men’s heads….


  14. Tamara Woods says:

    Zoe, this was such an interesting topic to write about. A nice think piece- not angst-ridden at all.


  15. Bastet says:

    Awesomely written … giving much to reflect upon … a poem to read and re-read. Well done indeed.



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